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So lets walk away and forget eachothers name.
We're going to have to face the facts, things will never be same.
I'm looking up at the stars scattered across the stormy sky.
I think of all of our memories and begin to cry.

I loved you with all of my heart.
Things just haven't been the same since we part.
I just can't stand how much there is about you that I miss.
I just want to hold you one more time and share one last kiss.

Now I know what it's like to be alone.
Now I know what it's like to have a broken heart of my own.
Tell me will my heart ever heal?
All I want is to go back to when our love was real.

Though I try so hard I can't forget, it all comes back when I see your face.
No matter how hard I scream I just can't seem to erase.
All the long night's I've proved that I cared.
Let these rains wash away this love we once shared.
©2007-2009 ~Fennlt
:iconfennlt:

Author's Comments

The only sad poem ive written so far, It's about the first and fortunately the only time my heart has been broken.

Comments


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:iconmoony73:
This sounds familiar... awsome poetry, great rhyme and meter too. Good job! =D

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:iconcrimsonapathy:
i'm sorry that your heart was broken,
but this is an amazing pice, the opening lines caught my eye when i was logging in (it was under newst deviations) so i had to check it out
and i'm glad i did!
good job!
<3

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Save you tears for the day
When our pain is far behind
On your feet come with me
We are soldiers stand or die
:iconkochou-san:
absolutely beautiful <3

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Behind every bitch there's a guy who made her that way...
"I'm NOT crazy! I'm just thirsty!!!"
:iconigorizzy:
so nice...sad but nice...

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:iconartemisfire:
wow this is great! you really communicated well, I've totally felt like that before... just well done.
:iconfennlt:
I guess I should get depressed more often then lol. I often try to actually put my best lines toward the end, but I guess maybe I should mix it up once in a while

But I really appreciate the feedback, thanks
:iconryu-son:
Great job! I love the first stanza. :)

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And in the daylight we can hitchhike to Maine
I hope that someday I'll see without these frames
And in the daylight I don't pick up my phone
'Cause in the daylight anywhere feels like home
-Matt and Kim
:iconinspirational-dreams:
:hug: A very touching, an emotional poem. Well written :highfive:

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mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
- Dr. Seuss


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:iconfennlt:
Thanks =D, people don't realize how hard it is to communicate what you want to say and make it rhyme xD.
:iconfennlt:
Yeah, like I said its my only sad poem, the rest of my poems have a much happier theme to them. and thanks ^_^

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